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[gurdymonkey]

First he tugs her hat,
Then tweaks streaming locks of hair
And snatches at sleeves.
The wind teases, remorseless
As any favored brother.

Comments

[gottasing.livejournal.com]

Love it! Is there a name for this form?

[shalmestere.livejournal.com]

Nice :-)

[gurdymonkey.livejournal.com]

It's not a form, it's a disease.

http://www.wodefordhall.com/heianpoetryjam.htm is an article I wrote for TI on waka. A metric buttload of which I have been writing for awhile now and also can be found on my website.

[sasha-khan.livejournal.com]

I like this.

[gcmadtown81.livejournal.com]

A disease? What ever do you mean? Now if you'll excuse me while I go grab brush and paper. Must think of a good reply for this to add to over on Tousando.

[gurdymonkey.livejournal.com]

While you were not the "brother" I was thinking of at the time I wrote it, it certainly applies! Go for it.

[mamapduck.livejournal.com]

The first three lines had me thinking George.