Tanka challenge 4/3/12

[gurdymonkey]

The temple bells toll:
A spring night's dreaming mirrors
Life's impermanence.
In the dark I lie, counting
Beloved faces like coins.



(I think I riffed on the Gion Shoja passage of the Tale of the Heike before, but felt like taking another crack at it from a slightly different angle.)

Comments

[katerit.livejournal.com]

The last two lines are great - especially the last phrase.